Shooting Star

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Shooting Star

Post by Dan »

This song is about a relationship.

The song is a coversation between two people. The first and third verses are spoken by the male and the second and fourth verses are spoken by the female.

In the chorus the first 3 lines are sung by the male, the next 3 by the female, the next 3 lines are male again, and the last 2 are sung by the female.

The verses show that they think they hate each other, and the chorus is thier realisation that they have nobody else, and are actually madly in love.... if that makes sense.

ANyway, I have a brilliant vocal melody for this, and its a slow ballady-type song.

Constructive criticism please!

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My head is messed up
I thought I had enough
But its never enough
When your around

My arms shake
Thanks to the drugs I take
Due to the drugs I take
I still love you

Baby
Please dont
let them get me
I wont
tell them
where you are
Some day
we shall
run away together
Your my guiding light
my shooting star

My legs dont work
and their covered in dirt
you make me feel like dirt
just being you

Dont play the fool
I wont play by your rules
one day i'll break your rules
and then your hurt

Baby
Please dont
let them get me
I wont
tell them
where you are
Some day
we shall
run away together
Your my guiding light
my shooting star

Baby
Please dont
let them get me
I wont
tell them
where you are
Some day
we shall
run away together
Your my guiding light
my shooting star
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Post by BrandonCorey »

Great song
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Post by HilgaMan »

Absolutely great job man.
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Post by shivv_55 »

I really like it
nice work!
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Post by Boni »

I quite like that
Awesome
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