song about how i'm in love with this girl even though she doesn't treat me right
As I awake with a start
I can’t feel my stolen heart
You’ve locked it away
Destroyed the key
Trapped me in my misery
Tear me apart
Steal my heart
Naïve to think this was true
From you my love
I will never depart
Because I am restrained here
Alone in the dark
Your love has seduced me
Like a drug, you’ve induced me
In a coma, self-inflicted
But to you, I’m still addicted
Tear me apart
Steal my heart
Naïve to think this was true
From you my love
I will never depart
Because I am restrained here
Alone in the dark
Never cease to use me
I love when you abuse me
Now I hold back this pain
With you, I’ll never be sane
Tear me apart
Steal my heart
Naïve to think this was true
From you my love
I will never depart
Because I am restrained here
Alone in the dark (x2)
Forever is a lie
Concocted by my eyes
But I just can’t let go
I’ll love you till I die
RATE and REVIEW and help me come up with a title!
thanks
Lonely Love (working title)
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Re: Lonely Love (working title)
I like it! i'd call it hopeless or actually just go with Lonely Love (i think that's a good title for this piece)
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Re: Lonely Love (working title)
alright thanks for taking the time to read
Re: Lonely Love (working title)
That was good, enjoyed it
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Re: Lonely Love (working title)
I like it! :) I would keep this title, it's good.
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Re: Lonely Love (working title)
I actually think this is really great! Don't know about the title but everything else works. Good job!
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Re: Lonely Love (working title)
Nice! Some words are taken from Sum 41 songs, that makes it even more badass.
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Re: Lonely Love (working title)
Working Title?
Are you writing this for Metallica?
Are you writing this for Metallica?
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Re: Lonely Love (working title)
Thanks to everybody for the reviews
And just for the record, I just put working title because I wanted to see what other titles people could come up with, because I am open to change on this title. I kind of just slapped on a title and I wasn't a huge fan of it. Any other suggestions are appreciated!
And just for the record, I just put working title because I wanted to see what other titles people could come up with, because I am open to change on this title. I kind of just slapped on a title and I wasn't a huge fan of it. Any other suggestions are appreciated!